lunes, 1 de febrero de 2010

Myth The Borins


The Borins





Many years ago, in Oxama, Mexico a little girl named Sara was walking in the street, there a man was sitting down,he was very dirty only with some pants and a red cap. Sara didn't wanted to talk with him but he started to called her. Hey little girl, come, come, the man said. Sara went near him. My name is Calangas, and yours? asked the man. I am Sara, I am 9 yers old and you... I am... the man took a second to thing and then he said I am 10 years old, then the man converted in a child. Wow you change of age¡ admired Sara, the man went runing away.
Sara with a lot of scare went back him. She arrived to a black house, all was dark. Then she saw a light,she went to that palce. There was Calangas flying or better flouting with out wings. Sara was soo surprised. Sudenly the boy went down. Oh no now you know my secrete told the boy. That you fly? asked Sara. No, that I am a god, I am the god of the Borins. The Borins, what is that? asked Sara again. It is a sweet, small, delicius ball that you can eat, come I will show you one, said Calangas. He guied Sara to a little place with a lot of colorful balls. Eat one said Calangas. Sara eat one little ball. Oh this is delicious.
Sara ate, ate and ate... finally she ate 234 Borins, she got sick and vomit a lot. Calangas thought that was funny, now i will say you Gomit told Calangas. Sara stayed in the house weeks and every days Calangas floated to bring her more Borins. Sara only slept and ate Borins. One day Sara was afraided bacause she started to float nad she was like a ballon, the boy Calangas told her that if a person eat a lot of Borins he or she will convert in one.


One afternoon Sara

went out to float, the sun started to hurt her and in a second she exploted, Borins were flying it was a Borins rain. Desafortunadly Sara dead but her memories can be now in your mouth. In her honor Calangas changed the name of the Borins now are called Gums like Gomit.



The end

6 comentarios:

  1. Hi Mafe, I really like your work it is a really nice story and it is very funny but you have some mistakes like;
    It is not Oaxama it is Oaxaca, it is not thing it is think, it not flouting it is floating, it is not soo it is so, it is not secrete it is secret, it is not afraided it is afraid.
    Very good work!!

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  2. Hello Mafe I thing that your stroy have too much context but also you have some errors of grammar but in general is so good.

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  3. I love the bubble gum thing very good chek your grammar and the us of part .
    Lisa

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  4. I like some much this history you must have to check spelling =)

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  5. The story is very good but be carefull with you grammar!!!
    i will like to eat one boring MMmmm...

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